Thursday, March 11, 2010

56 ladies boiling in a bucket

--Migue's 56-word noir tale, in response to March 9th's prompt:

“56 ladies boiling in a bucket”

The detective takes a glance to the bucket and back to him.
“ What do you mean?”
“Stupid”- he sniggers.

“Why 56 ladies… in a bucket?” - she notices the doctor’s looking at her legs.
“When he came here” – he looks up again - “he brought that bucket with 54 rings inside.”
“And?”
“A nurse was killed two days later.”

--Migue

5 comments:

  1. Well, Migue, very "boiled" story! :) Nice writting, my dear friend,... and thrilling. :S
    I love it.
    Let's see what I'll be able to do. ;)

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  2. Migue, you are really, really good at this:))) I am puzzled with numbers, but that is another story:)))

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  3. you got that terse, hard-boiled feel perfectly!

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  4. Very clever play on words!
    Great job!!!

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  5. Thank youuu.
    The 54 rings, the nurse was the 56. The detective asks "Why 56?.." "Stupid", and if you count the number of words in the story, you got 57.
    The hidden message for the reader is that ... you will be the next one :).



    Congratulations Zoe! Great game! Thanks, repeat it please, don't stop it now :).

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